The introduction: From Joe's POV (major one)
He walked into the apartment and
was immediately pushed down into a rickety squeaking chair. His aunt Ethel
whirled around the apartment taking things out, and because of her frenzy most
of her words were cut off.
“I really do think,” she would say
before turning around and busying herself once more.
“And that’s why,” she said
gesturing with a spoon rounding back on Joseph.
“Anyway, I just really am grateful
he thought of me, y’know?” she said, finishing at last, and placed a meatloaf
in front of Joseph.
It smelled lovely, like a lost
summer day. It reminded him of the Moldau. He ate it swiftly, and although
taking a fair amount of moisture from his mouth he understood it was important
that she shared this with him.
“Sammy’s really a good boy, He’s an
artist. At empire novelties. He’s getting really very close to a promotion-“
she cut herself off swiftly, having remembered something at the recesses of her
mind.
“-I should go wake him, remind him
you’re coming.” She left him in the dimly lit kitchen, staring at his own
reflection in the oven door. He got up, not having recognized himself, and
followed her into Sammy’s room. A bleary-eyed bloke sat tousled in a dark twin
bed peeking one eye open with his hair sticking up. His aunt Ethel rushed over and did something
he couldn’t quite see, but heard a sharp intake of breath. Joe stood still,
hardly taking breath. Kornblum had helped him focus his physical efforts on
other endeavors.
Ethel stood aside and smiled, and
gestured for him to sit. She rushed up to Joe and adjusted his collar and
swiftly left the room closing the door.
Light strewn in through the edges
of the door and the doorway. The light from inside was warmer with a melancholy
blue tint. The light coming in through the window was cool and realistic and
hit behind Sammy’s back, putting his face in shadow. Joe knew his own face must
be easy to see, so he decided that no reaction was better than the wrong one.
He started undressing. He could see
the chair and the table. He took off his soft tweed jacket and lightly placed
it on the chair. He unbuttoned his shirt, pulled at the corners, and placed
that on the chair, leaving him in his undershirt.
Joe lightly placed his stack of
assorted magazines and newspapers underneath the chair. When he had gotten in,
he immediately went to the nearest newsstand searching for a glimmer of hope in
a headline or in an undersigned note. He went so far as to buy the Women’s Wear
magazine hoping for a mention of the conditions in Prague. Most of the pages were the mainstream news,
and many had missing letters from the haste of printing.
He heard a light pat from the bed
and crawled in next to Sammy. He could have sworn that Ethel had pushed Sammy
all the way to the edge of the bed, and he noted that he had regained a few
inches, making it a very cramped ordeal.
“Not Sammy, Sam. And I’m sorry.”
Joe just nodded. He laid there, evened his breathing, and tried to pretend to
be asleep. He did not want to deal with an experience with someone judgmental
at this hour, on this day. As he laid there, his face lit by a faint line of
cool blue and yellow light, he realized that he was so very far from Prague.

Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed your retelling of the introduction. The simplicity of the scene gives the reader a calm feeling though your word choice, especially when talking about, "The light from inside was warmer with a melancholy blue tint". But even with the serenity, you balance it well with the rushing around of Ethel, assuring that the reader does not doze off. When I first read your passage, I almost didn't realize that it was not an actual excerpt from the book, thinking maybe you were going to analyze it. I obviously haven't read Kavalier & Clay, but through the dialogue you used and through reading your microblogs, I have been able to get a clear feeling for the style of the book and the characters it includes. Your writing is amazing!
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